the walls are dumb and the bed asleep
mirror reflecting the hush, no cry
I quietly open the balcony door
letting the soft breeze enter the space
and fill the room's calmness with a try.
I seal the empty chair and look around void
the night bulb glowing with insects around
the fan moves with slow pace
without a break I keep watching them
as incessantly the stillness surround.
the floor uncleaned with speckles of dust
cockroach relaxing under the cupboard angle
outside the absence of moon
killing the stars anxious
9 comments:
priyanka, I love this work. very much instills a mood melancholy, somewhere in middle between depression and medatative. great oneshot
Monty / bum
A lot of great imagery here and perfect setting of tone.
This is just too amazing. It is eerie in its own way. Great work!
The first line was original, hooking me right into the poem. Imaginative One Shot!!
Oh wowwiiess... everything about this was simply awesome! Refreshing, actually! Even the roach made me alert! :)
A very beautifully captured moment, Priyanka... lovely one shot!
Just super! & I feel even more connected to your words now that I'm back in India :)
Dear Priyanka
A great view of the night.. and very great imagery.. thanks
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I had to come back and add you to my "Taj Mahal of Blogs" list - because I just love what you write :))
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